Some great examples of researching the feedback I gave 'don't interrupt your sentences with quotes you can put into your own words'. Sophie (BAPP) then went away and researched this ideas and sent me the follow examples:
Examples of Paraphrasing rather than direct quotations
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Examples of Paraphrasing rather than direct quotations
EXAMPLE 1
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This follows the emphasis Lo et al place on student variations as they explain
“Crucial is a deep and thorough understanding of the different ways by which students come to acquire the capability targeted”. (2002, p. 4).
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This follows the emphasis Mun Ling Lo et al place on student variations. They explain how vital it is to understand how contrasting capabilities require adjustable targets. (Lo et al, 2002, p. 4).
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Twyla Tharp explains that this type of Tacit knowledge
'doesn't need to be accessed through conscious effort'. (Tharp and Reiter, 2006 p 65.)
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Twyla Tharp, author of 'The Creative Habit' (Tharp and Reiter, 2006 p 65.) explores this type of tacit knowledge which she characterises as automatic, non-verbal and sensed rather than articulated.
Thank you Adesola and Sophie, this is most helpful.
ReplyDeleteThank you for explaining this. Double challenge when english is not the first language (!)
ReplyDeleteReally helpful, I was speaking to Helen also about using quotes, when to use them and where to use them. Realising that I prefer to read literature when the author talks about what she has explored in another piece of literature instead of using quotations all the way through out, in the middle of the sentences, I can see that is my preference and how I take in information. By looking at which articles are easier for me to understand as a reader, I am aiming to write with a narrative that is structured and cohesive for the reader.
ReplyDeleteThis is a useful take on different ways to present our writing, thank you :)
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